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Lesson Six: What To Look For When Revising
When
editing, make sure to pay careful attention to:
SUBSTANCE
Substance refers
to the content of the essay and the message you send out.
It can be very hard to gauge in your own writing. One good
way to make sure that you are saying what you think you are
saying is to write down, briefly and in your own words, the
general idea of your message. Then remove the introduction
and conclusion from your essay and have an objective reader
review what is left. Ask that person what he thinks is the
general idea of your message. Compare the two statements to
see how similar they are. This can be especially helpful if
you wrote a narrative. It will help to make sure that you
are communicating your points in the story. Here are some
more questions to ask yourself regarding content.
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Have
I answered the question asked?
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Do
I back up each point that I make with an example? Have
I used concrete and personal examples?
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Have
I been specific? (Go on a generalities hunt. Turn the
generalities into specifics.)
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Could
anyone else have written this essay?
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What
does it say about me? After making a list of all the
words you have used within the essay -- directly and
indirectly -- to describe yourself, ask: Does this list
accurately represent me?
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Does
the writing sound like me? Is it personal and informal
rather than uptight or stiff?
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Regarding
the introduction, is it personal and written in my own
voice? Is it too general? Can the essay get along without
it?
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What about
the essay makes it memorable?
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STRUCTURE
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Is
each paragraph roughly the same length? Stepping back
and squinting at the essay, do the paragraphs look balanced
on the page? (If one is significantly longer than the
rest, you are probably trying to squeeze more than one
thought into it.)
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Does
my conclusion draw naturally from the previous paragraphs?
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Have I varied
the length and structure of my sentences?
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INTEREST
Many people think
only of mechanics when they revise and rewrite their compositions.
As we know, though, the interest factor is crucial in keeping
the admissions officers reading and remembering your essay.
Look at your essay with the interest equation in mind: personal
+ specific = interesting. Answer the following:
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Is
the opening paragraph personal?
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Do
I start with action or an image?
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Does
the essay show rather than tell?
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Did
I use any words that are not usually a part of my vocabulary?
(If so, get rid of them.)
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Have
I used the active voice whenever possible?
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Have
I overused adjectives and adverbs?
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Have
I eliminated clichés?
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Have
I deleted redundancies?
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Does
the essay sound interesting to me? (If it bores you,
imagine what it will do to others.)
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Will
the ending give the reader a sense of completeness?
Does the last sentence sound like the last sentence?
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PROOFREADING
When
you are satisfied with the structure and content of your essay,
it is time to check for grammar, spelling, typos, and the
like. You can fix obvious things right away: a misspelled
or misused word, a seemingly endless sentence, or improper
punctuation. Keep rewriting until your words say what you
want them to say. Ask yourself these questions:
- Did
I punctuate correctly?
- Did
I eliminate exclamation points (except in dialogue)?
- Did
I use capitalization clearly and consistently?
- Do
the subjects agree in number with the verbs?
- Did
I place the periods and commas inside the quotation marks?
- Did
I keep contractions to a minimum? Do apostrophes appear
in the right places?
- Did
I replace the name of the proper school for each new application?
- Have I caught
every single typo? (You can use your spell-checker but
make sure that you check and re-check every change it
makes. It is a computer after all.)
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Continue
to Real Essay Gaffes
From ESSAYS THAT WILL GET YOU INTO COLLEGE, by Amy Burnham,
Daniel Kaufman, and Chris Dowhan.
Copyright 1998 by Dan Kaufman. Reprinted by arrangement
with Barron's Educational Series, Inc.
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